Tuesday 24 September 2013

Part 3

Fade In 

A young girl enters the room on her phone, we only see half her face from her left. She rushes towards a table, where a hunched figure sits with her back to the camera.

16 year old Mia, with her loose brunette curls dangling, waits beside the table eager to speak as she lays her phone on the table.



Mia: 
Look, I know you're scared, but everyone says this is one of the things they want to do before they die and, well, putting it bluntly, we are going to die soon.

Ellie, the hunched figure, turns to face Mia, giving her a glum look as a response.

Ellie: 
Bunking school, isn't what I want to do Mia, its what you want to do. I just want to die, I want to die now and go to heaven. That's all I want.

Mia: 
I've had to deal with your roller coaster moods for so long Ells, yesterday you were begging me to do this, now you're acting like its my idea. I know you'll regret not doing it, so lets go.

Mia drags Ellie out of her chair and forces her out the door. 
The camera follows them, then faces a closed door. The next shot is now following the two from their right side as they head to the school gate.

Mia: 
We'll just say we are sixth former's and they'll let us out.

The office phone rings, Mia answers whilst non diagetic background music starts to play, and the gate opens.

Ellie:
Then what?

Mia: 
Then we run

As the two head out the gate, Mia ruffles through her jacket pockets.

Ellie: 
Have you lost something?

Mia: 
Well I sort of left my phone on the classroom table, maybe we can do this next week (said with a nervous laugh)

Ellie: 
Oh God, next time be organised please, because what we just did was really sad.

Both girls walk back through the gate and into the empty class room.
Mia picks up her phone from the table and they both sit beside each other.

Mia:
SO what are we doing tomorrow, lying on a zebra crossing?

Ellie: 
Why not?

Both girls face each other and laugh.

Fade Out



1 comment:

  1. www confident and carefully crafted, both dialogue and action, some attempt to use create drama and fit the brief.

    ebi formatting makes it hard to read and does not conform to the script format requested (you need to get a Scribd account). Consider cutting back on dialogue and using more action. telling the story in images.

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